Hey!
Thank you for asking me to beta your story.
English isn't my first language, but if you think it will help, I'm all yours! Just make sure someone else checks it as well.
If you want you can sent your work to: eendagsvliegje86@hotmail.com
I'll try to read and check it as soon as possible. I'm rather busy with university at the moment, but I will try to make time.
Good luck with the teaching! Out of curiosity: what do you teach?
greetz Piek