Thank you for the kind words, and even more, for the concrit! For the "Say,..." I was trying to convey a sense of Davey's just having thought of the question-- what else would a Brit use to preface a sentence like that? I doubt many American kids use Say either, though I can see a 1950s sitcom kid doing it. The Dursley household (Vernon and Petunia) seemed curiously anachronistic for me in that way, mostly from the movies, so the word seemed to fit. Even though, of course, Davey is growing up nothing like his poor father. This is fiction, after all.
With the others, yeah. I was trying to give a sense of him as a tentative, shy, mumbly little guy. Not unlike my own Wee Hob.
I'm kind of surprised to see comments about a child of Dudley's being magic as a new idea-- I'm new to the fandom, but I would have thought it would be more common. Though honestly, I picked the only kid who could be connected to Harry in some way and that I could name myself, and that was the only solution I saw. This story could not have been written about an "Albus"....
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Date: 2007-10-19 12:45 pm (UTC)With the others, yeah. I was trying to give a sense of him as a tentative, shy, mumbly little guy. Not unlike my own Wee Hob.
I'm kind of surprised to see comments about a child of Dudley's being magic as a new idea-- I'm new to the fandom, but I would have thought it would be more common. Though honestly, I picked the only kid who could be connected to Harry in some way and that I could name myself, and that was the only solution I saw. This story could not have been written about an "Albus"....
Thanks again for the comments.